Seventh Kyū
The first time you step foot in a dōjō is a humbling experience. You struggle to get your shoes off while keeping an eye on the students going through their paces. They flow like water. They’re hard as glacial ice. Their moves are as smooth as melted butter, then so fast you can’t follow them.
There are no seats, so you just stand there gawking until some guy whose head is about the same height as your shoulders comes over. He welcomes you with a formal bow, then takes you over to a corner to talk. But all the time you’re watching those senior students working out.
You want to do that.
My First Kata
That’s pretty much how I came into the writing world. I saw the senior students working and wanted to do the same things they could. I started writing my first book. My first kata.
I self-published it almost a year ago, and started listening to what people had to say about it. Almost all of the feedback I got was from fellow students. Some of them are kohai. Others are true sempai that can make their gi pop.
After listening to all of the feed back, I decided to do yet another revision. I did some clarification and added another chapter to give the story line some closure. I worked ASSidulously until about a week ago, when I decided I’d done all I could do.
I was vibrating from the gallons of coffee I’d ingested. The ashtrays were full. There were holes worn in the bottoms of my slippers from walking in circles. Still, I wasn’t confident of the work as a whole. I needed a trained sempai to look it over and tell me where I was screwing up.
I contacted Rebecca Dickson and asked her if she would work with me. Thankfully, she agreed, and I sent her a copy. She begins work on Friday.
Za-rei
Until this testing is complete, The Valley Walker will be taken off the shelves.
All of you who have read it and given me feedback have my deepest thanks. There is truly no way to repay you for your time and effort, so I won’t even try.
Anyone who is just starting to read it can stop now and wait for the revision… or continue… or send me hate mail. It is my own bumbling that created this, and I guess I’ll have to live with the consequences.
Please accept my deepest apologies for my ineptitude. I’m on my knees. My forehead is touching the tatami. I would perform yubitsume, but I need all of my fingers to type.
I’m excited for you Tim! I hope you plan to post a little about the process with Rebecca and look forward to when you hit the publish button on the final copy.
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I’m eager to see how this goes. We’ll see. 🙂
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Good for you. Sometimes we need to consult a professional. Will you keep us posted on the progress/process?
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It’ll be a learning experience for me, as just about everything is. I’ll pass on what I can from what I learn.
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Tim! I loved your book. I was completely drawn into the story, and It moved me to tears. I can’t imagine what you are changing, but whatever you are doing, I know it will be even better – because that’s who you are. I wish you well with the changes, and I’m looking forward to reading when you publish again. I’ll enjoy it the second time, too.
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I’m a rug-straightener, for sure. 😉
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Nothing to apologize for. Striving to improve upon one’s work is admirable. I wish you luck!
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Thanks, Doc. I think it’s better. I think it’s close. We’ll see what happens. 😉
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What courage! I am not a writer, just write poetry. I nevertheless admire the tenacity and perseverance one needs to write a whole book but what a lesson for me, this post is… Demanding perfection and go through all that trouble to achieve it
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It was a tough decision, but I feel strongly enough about it to go ahead and do it.
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As a fellow student, I say get the hell off your knees before I beat your ass.
It’s a damn good book and you’re being ridiculous. All books can be improved, so I can’t imagine how good the next improved version will be, but don’t apologize. Don’t second-guess yourself.
And be very proud. True masters are never satisfied. But they’re also respected. You think of how many have read, reviewed, or emailed you about your book. Think of how many sales you’ve had.
I’ve read a lot of published crap by best-sellers that wasn’t as good as your book. You know I don’t bull-shit. I told you it wasn’t my kind of book, but if sucked so bad you should kill it, I would have told you that.
You’re a vet. You’re a friend. We watch each other’s backs.
So, shake off whatever was said and whoever said it. Don’t let that shit get in your head, and don’t make this writing gig more complex than it really is. Keep telling good stories, and keep writing with the skills you possess.
Line-by-line, you’re one of the most talented writers I know. Hang in there and shake this shit off. Don’t let critics who have never had the nerve to publish a single damn word get you down.
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I’m on a different timetable than a lot of people, Stan.
This isn’t an apology for my writing, or for being who I am, but for my total lack of a business sense and the quandary that it puts some people in that have just started reading it.
You’re a good man, bud. It’s a good feeling knowing that you’re there, letting me know straight-up if you think I’m making a mistake.
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In the grand scheme of things, it’s probably not even a big deal, but I was worried your confidence had been shaken. I misinterpreted what you were saying, I think, which probably isn’t that rare… : )
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It’s something I have to work on. My thoughts are clear as hell to me, but I don’t always get it across to others.
Your friendship means the world to me, man. Glad you’ve got my back.
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I feel the same. Only a couple of sick military vets would appreciate someone threatening to kick their ass…
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I’m in wonder of you!
Lucky me, techno-time has kept me till this new thing unleashes!
So looking forward!
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I’ll keep everyone posted. That’s a promise. 😉
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Tim, your book was good, soon it will be great look forward to seeing it revised. Also I hope you don’t tell us what you revised, see if we notice.
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Thanks, Keith. If someone goes through the trouble to reread it, they’ll notice. No doubt. 😉
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Hmm, I’m hearing what Stan is saying up there but I’ll give you a little less tough love.
I thought The Valley Walker was phenomenal, and I don’t just say that for grins. I think it takes an obscene amount of courage for any of us to put our work – our soulful insides – out there for all to see and judge.
I would go crazy if I thought too much about my “finished” works. Sometimes I want to just take them all down, and go back to the secretive writer, the one nobody knew existed.
Instead, I’m going to keep on keeping on. I don’t feel that my work has been groundbreaking or in the same league as much that is out there. But my point is that I did it and I will keep doing it…for the love.
Personally, I loved your story and I would love to hear you tell another one. This is my humble opinion and nothing more.
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Like I told Stan, I’m on a different timetable from a lot of folks. I can get pretty far out there at times.
I’m so happy that you liked it, Britt. That means an awful lot to me.
The next one is pushing pretty hard to get out, so I can’t delay it much longer. 😉
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Ok. Well, here’s one of these… : )
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Good on you, Tim. Best of luck with then changes and let us know when it’s ready to go 😉
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Will do, Dianne. We’ll see what Becky has to say.
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Interesting to see the re-write, Tim. I just started the novel, so I will wait for the new version. Can I ask why you chose Rebecca Dickson?
Interestingly enough, I posted on hari kiri or seppuku today. haha. {{{Hugs}}} kozo
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Saw your post on seppuku. Good stuff.
I’ve seen some of Ms. Dickson’s work, and was impressed.
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No need to apologize, Tim. It’s perfectly understandable for you to want to re-write something if you’re not pleased with it. I know that I’ve even considered it for my own book.
Though this puts me in a pickle. I just started reading your book yesterday, so now I don’t know whether to continue or wait for the changes. 😉
Also, I loved all your Japanese references!
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Gomen nasai. 😉
I’ll try to make it up to you.
CHOCOLATE!!!!!
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Like so many others, I wanted to say that I just loved your book and never felt like it needed any changes whatsoever. But I completely respect your desire to revisit it. Every artist has his own creative path to follow and you must follow yours. I look forward to rereading the book in its recreation just as I look forward to your other future projects. You have a fan in me!
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It means so much to me that you liked it. I’m always very nervous when someone I respect says they’re reading it.
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Hey, Tim – this is a big step and I respect that. I haven’t finished the book yet…but one thing I have noticed is that there is a beautiful story in there, but it could do with a little space. As I was reading this I thought how timely that I’ve got a great reviewer looking at it. The angle I gave him for the reviews that I wanted on my site was something that would provide knowledge for people who had published their own books with little editorial input from others. I wonder though, seeing as it’s the original version that he’s reading, if that is going to be useful for you. I know that some of his post is going to look at point of view, which is something we both thought might help ‘unclutter’ the book. He’s not due to finish the piece till April as I’m away March and wanted to have another face to face with him before I put it on the site. Anyway, let me know your thoughts.
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I’ll make a great example of a writer trying to learn. 😉
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😉
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Best of luck, Tim! We’ll all be impatiently waiting, but it’ll be worth it. 😉
P.S. If you decide to pick up an alter ego and start crime fighting, let me know if you need a sidekick to spout off puns on your behalf. 😀
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I think it’s going to teach me a lot.
Sidekick? No way, Jose. With your brains and talent, you’d end up taking over the whole operation. 😉
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You are quite something, Tim. I’m nervous and excited on your behalf!
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She’s just started sending me her ideas. It’s going to be a ton of work.
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Put the coffee on.
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Indeed. COFFEE!
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will be interested to see the difference… x
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Yes. Me too. 🙂
I haven’t really started going over her suggestions yet. Kids and grand-kids are here for weekend.
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Hope you had a lovely weekend 🙂
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Nothing to apologize for! You are growing and learning and that is all anyone an do. I know I put my first novel out too soon and had to pull it for revisions. Stay strong, sir!
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Thanks, Erik. Appreciate it, man.
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Tim –
Not being happy with your own work is normal. So is wanting to improve it. Good luck to you, my friend. It’s a tough thing to do to make the call you did, but I have a feeling a good book is only going to be better. Looking forward to your updates. We’re all with you here. 😉
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